please revise this Essay following the instructions below correct grammar give a catchy opening and underline thesis by 10pm tonight

Essay 1 Rough Draft - Information (300 words) Hi Students, Please start writing your Essay 1 and stop at 300 words, (about two paragraphs) or more. ------------------------------ Your first paragraph should include (about 150 words): - Hook to grab the reader's attention - Quick summary of the TED Talk - 2-4 sentences - Your thesis - UNDERLINED. 150 words (about) ------------------------------ Your second paragraph should include (about 150 words): - A transitional word or phrase which smoothly leads into a topic sentence (your first, major point). - Evidence and examples, which support your topic sentence. - I suggest incorporating 1-2 short "quotes" from the speaker of the TED Talk as supporting evidence in each body paragraph. Be sure to give credit to the speaker. For example: Gates explains "quote here." Gates suggests "quote here." 150 words (about) 300 words total -------------------------------------------------- Include a Works Cited page - Cite your TED Talk correctly in MLA Format See the "How to Cite a TED Talk on a Works Cited page" document in the Week 1 < Essay 1 folder at the bottom. -------------------------------------------------- GRADING RUBRIC: 3 points - CONTENT: 300 word essay draft which is well-written and on-topic 1 points - STYLE: staying in third person point of view (Avoid: I, me, us, we, our, you, or your); using formal, academic language appropriate for a college essay 1 points - FORMAT: underlining the thesis; correct MLA format; AND including the Works Cited information for the TED Talk Essay 1 Outline - Assignment Information Your Essay 1 Outline should contain your thesis and your three, main points. Supporting points are not necessary for this outline. Please use the format illustrated below; include the four required subtitles: Thesis; I. First Point:; II. Second Point:; III. Third Point: (Four required subtitles) Thesis: Your thesis should: Name the title of the TED Talk Identify the speaker of the TED Talk State which appeal is most successful (make an argument) Mention the other two appeals as well Mention the general topic of the TED Talk I. First Point: Which is the most effective appeal in the TED Talk and why? (give an example) II. Second Point: Which appeal is less successful and why? (give an example) III. Third Point: Which appeal is the weakest and why? (give an example) When writing your outline, please use formal, academic language. Also, show your ethos as a writer by staying in the third person point of view (he, she, students, Americans, citizens, etc.). ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Outline Format: Your name Last Name 1 Dr. Myers English 1301.section number Date Essay 1 Outline Thesis: ___________ (underline your thesis; Full sentence)________________________. I. First point:___________ (Full sentence)________________________. II. Second point: ___________ (Full sentence)________________________. III. Third point: ___________ (Full sentence)________________________. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- -------------------------------------- GRADING RUBRIC: 3 points - Thesis and three, main points written in full sentences. The thesis contains required components: TED Talk name, speaker’s name, clear argument (which appeal is strongest), and also lists the other, two appeals. 1 points - Formal academic language used, no grammatical errors, third person point of view used 1 points - Correct format, MLA format (Underlined thesis sentence; double-spaced, left and right headers are correct, Times 12 font, etc. - see MLA Format example on the syllabus)