Short written paper needs some revision: Hi, I have a short written paper that needs some revision. Could you help me please?

Hi, I have uploaded my paper with a pdf file of the same paper, but with my professor's comments. I have also uploaded the two stories that I used to write the paper. Please read the two stories, then look at the paper that has comments, and just edit what the comments ask for. Thanks
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 02:44 AM

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welcome friend
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 02:44 AM

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Please I need it by tomorrow at 4pm. The time now is 10:48pm
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 02:47 AM

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cool
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 02:49 AM

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These are the instructions that the paper is based on: For the second literary analysis, select two or more texts from the class readings that seem to handle a particular problem/issue similarly, or that share a similar theme. How do the authors use language, tone, structure, character etc. to achieve similar meanings? How do the authors take a similar problem (e.g. how gender affects the perception of mental illness) and handle it slightly differently? You can also examine the use of a particular literary device or rhetorical technique (e.g., narration, dialogue, irony, etc.) across multiple texts. Find three to four elements from the texts upon which to build your comparison and determine the argument that you want to make. Remember that you're not just listing similarities and differences--you're making a claim about the readings. In 6-7 pages, support your argument with specific textual evidence. Keep in mind that this assignment calls for both analysis and argumentation. Other things to keep in mind: Above all: read the text(s) carefully several times and be sure you understand 100% of what you've read. 1. don't summarize or describe what happens--focus on HOW and WHY. 2. for every main and supporting claim you make about a work, you must have evidence--you should be able to paraphrase/quote from/refer to specific passages. DON'T quote long passages--only quote enough to support or demonstrate the point you're making. DON'T quote something and then say this shows that...: 1) Make your point, 2) quote/paraphrase, then explain how (1) and (2) relate to one another and to your thesis. 3. cite everything. 4. if you're comparing-the works have to have something important in common, otherwise you'll end up with two little papers rather than one essay. 5. be prepared to do some research--re: the author, the setting, details in the work, literary structure, etc.
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 02:51 AM

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Hi, Have you finished?
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:13 PM

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Can I ask you something....was your paper original
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:15 PM

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What do you mean?
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:16 PM

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Sorry I want to upload it
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:17 PM

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Sorry, I don't know what do you mean?
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:21 PM

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I need to ask you....since you had already submitted the paper it turns to be plagiarized on my software..Is that okay with you
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:22 PM

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I need to ask you....since you had already submitted the paper it turns to be plagiarized on my software..Is that okay with you or you are submitting again via Turnitin
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:23 PM

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What is the percentage? Because I think that's because the paper has a lot of quotes
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:24 PM

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I submitted the paper before I ask you to revise it via Turnitin and it gave me 18% similarity
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:26 PM

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it is 86% I just checked and could not upload the paper because my account will be at risk
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:27 PM

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And the similarity was because of the quotes
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:27 PM

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Maybe that's because I have already submitted the paper before
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:28 PM

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That's why it is turning out to be 86% because you had already submitted
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:28 PM

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Oh so that's fine. Could you send me the revised version?
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:29 PM

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Yes that's why
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:29 PM

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so you are okay with it that way
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:30 PM

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Yeah! Because as I told you I submitted the paper before as a first draft and it gave me 18% similarity and it was because of the quotes. So that's why it gives you 86% now, becuase I submitted it before
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:32 PM

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cool
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:33 PM

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remember to release the FUNDS
phoniextutor | Apr 21, 2016, 19:34 PM

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Yeah sure!
User_8981 | Apr 21, 2016, 19:34 PM

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