hi i need help with english assignment my assigment is about arqumantive essay and i wrote about the impact of social median youth my professor does not agree with what i wrote she want me to rewire the easy and gave clear thesis statement i need eddite and rewrite my essay you can change the tattil to youth and children should not use social media also each body should related with thesis point i will upload my old paper and the instruction my professor feedback 1-Your thesis is not clear, Ekram. It should be written as one sentence and include the specific points you will be making in your paper. What is your argument? 2-Each body paragraph needs to begin with a topic sentence that links directly to the thesis statement. Use key words from the thesis to establish this link. 3-It is best to use direct quotations. Is this entire paragaph from Meyrowitz? 4-you have many ideas here, but without a strong thesis, your argument is not clear. You also need to use care with your sources. It is very difficult to differentiate between your thoughts and the sources that you have used. you can change the source also add counterarqument and rebuttal

hi i need help with english assignment my assigment is about arqumantive essay and i wrote about the impact of social median youth my professor does not agree with what i wrote she want me to rewire the easy and gave clear thesis statement i need eddite and rewrite my essay you can change the tattil to youth and children should not use social media also each body should related with thesis point i will upload my old paper and the instruction my professor feedback 1-Your thesis is not clear, Ekram. It should be written as one sentence and include the specific points you will be making in your paper. What is your argument? 2-Each body paragraph needs to begin with a topic sentence that links directly to the thesis statement. Use key words from the thesis to establish this link. 3-It is best to use direct quotations. Is this entire paragaph from Meyrowitz? 4-you have many ideas here, but without a strong thesis, your argument is not clear. You also need to use care with your sources. It is very difficult to differentiate between your thoughts and the sources that you have used. you can change the source also add counterarqument and rebuttal