Instruction
Write(a(Revision(Memo
As you revise your document, take each of the following aspects into consideration and
write a one-page memo explaining what you have changed in the original draft.
• Organization
o Is the order in which your material is organized appropriate for the purpose and
for your readers?
o Are headings persuasive and/or informative?
o Can you think of a better/more logical way of presenting your information?
• Completeness
o Is your document complete, does it sufficiently meet your purpose and your
audience’s information needs?
o Does your document contain all requested information?
• Style
o Do paragraphs have topic sentences?
o Do all the sentences in the paragraph pertain to the meaning you are building in
the paragraph?
o Are your sentences concise?
o Have you avoided using long paragraphs?
o Have you avoided using jargons, clichés and slangs?
o Have you used concrete action verbs whenever possible?
• Design/Illustrations
o Are you satisfied with your choice of fonts and sizes? Are they consistent
throughout the document?
o Did you use numbering and bulleted lists for quick comprehension when
necessary? (Numbered lists are used for representing a sequence or reflecting a
numbering system, such as the steps in your instructions; bulleted lists are used
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to highlight items that don’t necessarily show a chronology, such as the job
responsibilities in your resume).
o Is the format consistent—font selected, size, placement, and content of
headings?
o Are your visuals helping readers “see” and remember key ideas?
o Do all your visuals serve a practical function (as opposed to just being pretty on
the page)?
o Are all graphics placed in the appropriate locations within the text?
• Mechanics
o Have you checked for misspellings and for other mechanical errors, such as
misplaced commas, semicolons, colons, and quotation marks?
o Are your pages numbered?
o Have you correctly apply APA citation style for all references (textual and
graphical)?
Submitting(Your(Exercise
After you have completed revising your chosen document using the above checklist,
write a one-page memo explaining what you have changed in the original draft.
(I've attached the original paper i had written and also the comments the instructor left for me to revise)