Revising a document

Write(a(Revision(Memo As you revise your document, take each of the following aspects into consideration and write a one-page memo explaining what you have changed in the original draft. • Organization o Is the order in which your material is organized appropriate for the purpose and for your readers? o Are headings persuasive and/or informative? o Can you think of a better/more logical way of presenting your information? • Completeness o Is your document complete, does it sufficiently meet your purpose and your audience’s information needs? o Does your document contain all requested information? • Style o Do paragraphs have topic sentences? o Do all the sentences in the paragraph pertain to the meaning you are building in the paragraph? o Are your sentences concise? o Have you avoided using long paragraphs? o Have you avoided using jargons, clichés and slangs? o Have you used concrete action verbs whenever possible? • Design/Illustrations o Are you satisfied with your choice of fonts and sizes? Are they consistent throughout the document? o Did you use numbering and bulleted lists for quick comprehension when necessary? (Numbered lists are used for representing a sequence or reflecting a numbering system, such as the steps in your instructions; bulleted lists are used 2 to highlight items that don’t necessarily show a chronology, such as the job responsibilities in your resume). o Is the format consistent—font selected, size, placement, and content of headings? o Are your visuals helping readers “see” and remember key ideas? o Do all your visuals serve a practical function (as opposed to just being pretty on the page)? o Are all graphics placed in the appropriate locations within the text? • Mechanics o Have you checked for misspellings and for other mechanical errors, such as misplaced commas, semicolons, colons, and quotation marks? o Are your pages numbered? o Have you correctly apply APA citation style for all references (textual and graphical)? Submitting(Your(Exercise After you have completed revising your chosen document using the above checklist, write a one-page memo explaining what you have changed in the original draft. (I've attached the original paper i had written and also the comments the instructor left for me to revise)